Ghungroo - The Bells

I am happy, surprised and a bit high right now. I am learning English writing for writers now a days. I shared my few poems with my teacher Nancy Shifrrin, a poet and writer herself. This is what she wrote back to me:

I'm enjoying your poems immensely. Your feelings are deep and well-expressed. You really communicate. There are places where your images are especially strong and fresh, for example:

If I Die
"you will remember me forever/but only in albums/life will still run/like a roaring engine"

Story of a Girl
"People say she is a pill now/who cures others' sickness/she is a fruit now/ who fills others stomachs/and she is a tissue now/who wipes others'
tears"

Keep free-writing to develop strong concrete images which will illustrate your feelings and cause the reader to see things in new ways.
"Story of a Girl" is the strongest of these poems because the turn toward the end causes the reader to feel and think more deeply.

We want your unique poems to be supported by great skills.

Best, Nancy

Life is not same without you
in my life
life is not the way it was
in my life

its what should have been
years ago
years after
in my life

I love living......
without you
in my life..

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Celebrate
a new day
a new life
a new face
a new self...

Celebrate
emotions
happiness
desperation
persistence
loneliness


Celebrate
touch
taste
feel
sight
smell

Celebrate
the world
the self
the smile
the cryings
Celebrate being yourself...
Celebrate being V....


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Emotions are nameless...
I see them, talk to them
I feel them, I hold them...
I call them...I ignore them
I cry for them...I want them

But still...I can’t live them
When I want to
I can’t see,
When I wish to
Emotions...oh Emotions
You are nameless...tameness
and for me
you are always there, but you are
time less...

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I met with Horizon today
Calm, Still and Quite
i asked - He is dead, and you are so calm, so serene?
How can you...???

Horizon said - I see, I feel, I touch
the world,
from world's end!

I see, I feel
what is gone
& How its done!

I see
many coming in,
more going away...

I learn,
I learn..
to live - forever...
with love I get,
with care I give...
I live in hearts for ever!
I hold the love inside me...to be serene!!!

Camy, You are missed - by many friends, Co-workers, neighbors and the most by your family...for whom you are and you were the world!

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